Tussle in Cyberspace: Defining Tomorrow's Internet

• p. 1 Section 1, roadmap paragraph

  We conclude by discussing some tussle spaces

• p. 7 Section 4 heading

  REVISITING OLD PRINCIPLES

Judge's note: Page 1 shows the roadmap: landscape, then principles, then 'We conclude by discussing some tussle spaces'. The text layer and page 7 show headings 3 TUSSLE SPACES, 4 REVISITING OLD PRINCIPLES, 5 LESSONS FOR DESIGNERS and 6 CONCLUSION. The roadmap leaves out two substantial sections. 'Conclude' could be loose prose, so I rate this a minor observation.

Second check: another model agreed

• p. 8 Section 4.1, 'Failures of transparency will occur' paragraph

  intentionally give no error information or even reveal their presence

Judge's note: The page 8 crop shows this wording. The passage is about devices that hide themselves, which diagnostic tools must account for, so a negation is missing. The intended meaning is clear from context, so I rate it minor.

Second check: another model agreed

• p. 2 Section 1.2, right column, list of tussles

  those who seek anonymity vs. those would identify them

Judge's note: The page 2 image shows the printed text without 'who'. The parallel clause earlier in the sentence reads 'those who would reveal them'.

Second check: none (judge only)

• p. 3 Section 2.2, last paragraph

  the on-line analog of Consumers Reports

Only the authors can say what is right here.

Judge's note: Rests on outside knowledge: the magazine's name is 'Consumer Reports'. The page 3 image shows 'Consumers Reports'.

Second check: none (judge only)

• p. 4 Section 3.1.1

  Many ISP's refuse to route small address blocks

• p. 5 Section 3.1.4

  to be many ISP's directly competing to serve the customer

Judge's note: The page 4 image shows 'Many ISP's refuse'. The text layer has 'ISP’s' at lines 433 and 565 (pages 4 and 5) and 'ISPs' 17 times elsewhere. An apostrophe plural is an old but accepted style, so this is a consistency point only.

Second check: none (judge only)

• p. 5 Section 3.1.4, paragraph after first bullet

  service providers do not like loose source, because ISPs

Judge's note: The page 5 crop shows 'do not like loose source, because ISPs' with no hyphenation break. The rest of the passage speaks of 'source route(s)'. It could be informal shorthand, but a word looks dropped.

Second check: none (judge only)

• p. 5 Section 3.1.4

  ISPs enter into business arrangement that determine

• p. 5 Section 3.1.4

  ISPs enter into business arrangement that

Judge's note: The page 5 crop confirms the singular 'arrangement'. The verb 'determine' is plural, and the same sentence goes on to say 'overriding these arrangements'.

Second check: none (judge only)

• p. 7 Section 3.2.1, third paragraph

  one can be held accountable for ones actions

Judge's note: The page 7 crop shows 'ones actions' with no apostrophe.

Second check: none (judge only)

• p. 8 Section 4.1, first bullet

  The lost of trust calls for less transparency

• p. 8 Section 4.1, first bullet

  The lost of trust calls for less transparency, not more

• p. 8

  The lost of trust calls for less transparency, not more,

Judge's note: The page 8 crops show 'lost'.

Second check: none (judge only)

• p. 9 Section 4.2, fourth paragraph

  is doing nothing more that preserving the core design tenet

• p. 9 Sec 4.2

  doing nothing more that preserving the core design tenet

Judge's note: The page 9 crop shows 'more that'.

Second check: none (judge only)

• p. 9 Section 4.2, last paragraph

  If one can find spaces where tussle are unlikely

• p. 9 section 4.2

  spaces where tussle are unlikely

Judge's note: The page 9 crop shows 'tussle are unlikely'.

Second check: none (judge only)